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We all Want ....MISUNDERSTOOD EDITED

We all Want
what
to be read

''yes of course
are you so naive
why else compose
a poemy
only if you alone have to read
yes but don't ask any poet here
they will say
self seeker you are only

but compose fearlessly
so that you have been read
will prove you worthy ''

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

we all want to be read! The problem seems to be, that some people BEG to be read! They give reasons such as "I have been read on many sites, I have much more experience than others, I deserve to be read because I am so great", among other things. If you look at the poems composed by these people, you will notice that most of them are of this nature. "I should be read", not here is my poem about... This turns people off and then when the poem is a real message, a good poem about a subject that is worth reading, it gets a cursory look or skipped over. You have written some really great stuff, but when we see
"But compose fearless,
I have been read so many years more
than even Stan
others ran"

That doesn't make me want to read what you write. It makes me say: Who the f**k is this guy, that thinks he is the know-all be-all? Bah! Not every poem written is a great poem or even a good one. I have written many that have gotten maybe one or two comments and a few that have wound up on the Lonely Poems list, I don't complain, I try to figure out what I did wrong and edit and maybe do better next time. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

a good boy just needs a pat on the head. It used to be called the "My generation", now it's the "me generation"
What's great about it is.....EVERYONE can fit in!..nobody is left out!
UNFORTUNATELY: that's the problem also.haha.
This piece is particularly difficult to critique, but I do get the gist of what it points out. In your recent edit, lovedly, you forgot to close your quotation marks! You lose 40 points!

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

during edit perhaps I skipped it
so minus 50 would be okay

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MY REPLY yet

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that you have seen my point and edited your poem. I may have taken your piece here, in a different light, and I hope that you will understand, that I feel strongly that you are a good writer but find that you often ask for attention in an unseeming manner. Please forgive my irritation as I may have over reacted. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

i get misunderstood I compose according to my mind then still i look forward for amendment stan and i are the oldest neos perhaps we both dawned simultaneously thanks GEE
Like jess did do kick me as and when
MERRY XMAS and coming up 2022

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you get your points back, but I should get some of them for pointing it out to you. Does that sound okay to you?

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

LOL LOL
I am now beyond beyond all this
anyway thanks for your kindness

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