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we all are actors

Submitted by loved on Mon, 2014-01-27 12:49

As we age and are about to leave the stage

do not rage… we all are simple actors on a small stage … times the platform ….we stand in just a corner…. as strangers all around …. so I have found a solution…. to lessen human mental aberration …. try and detach from all around… be a man simple and sound …. believe yourself to be a new passenger …about to board a train -----heaven bound… with no return… leaving all memories… for times galleries… some years hence ,someone may recall… we once too traveled…..lessen your human desired burden .. to be remembered.. by whom…..

Style / type: 
Free verse
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

raj

Mon, 2014-01-27 13:21

As we age we become more philosophical don't we and begin to understand our purpose and role in the time span we are blessed to share with all elements of nature. passing on the baton to generation next. You have tickled the minds for sure. would be interesting to see how you work on this poem from draft stage to revised...

raj (sublime_ocean)

loved

Mon, 2014-01-27 13:36

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I read his laments
and my heart bleeds poems

you are a new found a young man
may be from Bombay
As you now encourage
I shall convert this to a poem
just for you soon
tc love and regards
Dear raj ur sublime

loved

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raj

Mon, 2014-01-27 13:50

Loved, as you can see, not me but you yourself have posted it as a workshop poem. I merely shared my thoughts / comment

raj (sublime_ocean)

loved

Mon, 2014-01-27 13:52

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which workshop is this
still ur wish is my command
shall do
my friend

loved

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raj

Mon, 2014-01-27 14:04

Frankly I don't know which workshop it is. I said so because 1. your post is not registered as a Blog and 2 after opening it the "workshop" tab turns to active mode "Grey color"...anyways, if you can make poem out of it, i believe it would be a good theme

raj (sublime_ocean)

loved

Mon, 2014-01-27 15:08

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shall

loved

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