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Water
In every droplet of water
lies the future of a generation
that has yet to come.
To waste it
is to invite tears of regret tomorrow,
the mark of despair.
Once lost,
it can never be replaced.
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
Roscoe Lane
Sat, 2016-10-01 04:03
Oh how very true,
Oh how very true, that water really is life. And how we humans waste water and life. Regards Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
alidzain
Sat, 2016-10-01 15:40
Hi Roscoe
I was thinking what to write when this one pops into my mind. Long time since I've heard from you. Even Rula and a few others seem to go missing. Hope everyone are well. So glad you are still here. Thanks for the visit, the read and the comment.
Alid
alidzain
Sat, 2016-10-01 16:36
Hi Mark
thanks for the visit, the read and the comment. Sometimes I like to write about nature. Usually my poems are about relationship and stories and experiences. Glad you liked this one.
Alid
jane210660
Sat, 2016-10-01 08:10
Oooh, made the hairs on my
Oooh, made the hairs on my arms stand up.
Very succinct, yet very powerful.
Jx
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alidzain
Sat, 2016-10-01 15:43
Thanks, Jane
for the visit, the read and the comment. I'm glad you liked it.
Alid
Esker
Mon, 2016-10-03 20:49
rivers of life
can describe a nation spilling blood
the innocent aged and damned
for ideals or foolhardy lusts of
ambition
the folly of war and nececity
of its change
thank U!
alidzain
Tue, 2016-10-04 12:14
Hi Esker
Thanks for the visit, the read and the comment.
Alid