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Watching the world

I watch the trees reach out their branches leaves facing up toward the sun
I roar with the waters so big and so strong making the ground undone
I cry with the moon so dark and so sad as the cows graze far down below
I sing with the winds a song of the world spreading my love to and fro
I leap with the ocean and lap at the waves as the sand and the water flirt
I bow with the rocks so humble and small, praising the grass and the dirt
And then I pray at the end of the day for this wonderful beautiful land
For I know though, how gracious and large it was all made by your hand

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I don’t have a title that sounds good enough. Please feel free to share suggestions. Also I want y’all to know that 4 of you were the cause of this poem. I thought of the first line in the chat room and I couldn’t get it out of my head so I made it into a poem.
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Comments

this is beautiful
I only got stuck on line 5
lap at the waves something is not setting right
may I suggest

I leap with the ocean( I love that image)
and lap as the waves
at thesand and the water that flirt

all in all this is such a delightful write

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Nice structured poem with good rhyme pattern...in the concluding line, if by "your" you mean the Lord, you may write it as "Your"...

I will come back and see if I can suggest a title as requested by you...

keep posting...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Hello, Viviana,
Much like a mantra, meditation or a spiritual affirmation. I very much wanted to respond with "Namaste." Beautiful!
Thank you,
Lavender

Darling girl, so young so much talent, i love your positivity in this, it's what i was hoping for. your spacing has improved, and i am so pleased to be here.

Thank you...Teddy

since you are looking out for alternative title...may be "World seen through my lens"

raj (sublime_ocean)

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