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Watches Watch.

Broken people, broken places
broken money for those play sets,
broken smiles that used to shine
broken watches still tell time.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
broken watch" in the poem is a metifor for broken people. because they may be broken but their hearts still beat and they still love, just not themselves sometimes
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Comments

post some of your long poems, ok?

cheers,
Jess
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