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A green bird’s breast wing spun in sunlit foresee razed, where I hung from stray film reels. In my lyrical prayer, code free and dedicated a certain morbidezza, was the laminate cell reconstituting the chaplet, the signs, the…The bird’s song, a deboned alouette, curtsie, I cried. I am the extra, Three Men and a Baby, Ghost, and that obscure Arabian film “The Blind Owl..” Ron Jeremy in “Jaws”: moving picture waste; poetry’s germ of growth.

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first this would be a poem if it would be written in stanza format. The way it is now makes it very difficult to read

Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

prose poem.

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poems have to be written in stanzas.

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