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Warrior Of Light

I will not follow you into the heart path of hate
to be torn by the claws of the beast within.
I'd rather be beheaded
than commit this inner sin.

Though you stab me with multi layered raw emotions,
plunging down into my chest and twisting in.
better that my soul be flayed
than I rouse the beast within.

I will not let your demon take away the brightness
that quells the shadow scratching inside my skin.
Peering from my deep insides
through flesh that's paper thin.

Though I am provoked and you goad my beast to battle
I will not concede and I will not give in
for your sake and for my sake
I will conquer..I will win.

I will look up to the heavens, were the light cascades
and find the path to where thoughts of love begin,
seeking the strength and power
to quiet the beast within.

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I use the opportunity to write poems while I am working. ( soldering printed components in printed circuit boards ).
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A beautiful write of the conflict that you will always win.
"WHY" because your inner self will outshine all the things that anyone can throw at you, well spoken..
Yours as always Ian.T
PS:- I worked many years in Avionics and also the telephone exchanges, so the soldering nudged my memory a little, lol..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Ahh so nice to see you. I guess we all have these inner battles - he he. I like that phrase " because your inner self will outshine all the things that anyone can throw at you". My dad was an electronic engineer and so is my husband. At the moment we are working for a company who makes the silver gates that swing open as you enter the super stores. We help build the motors for those + the conveyer belts.

( That's our main work ) but we do work for other people as well. I'm very lucky because I have my computer by my side and if I get a thought I just type it down. I couldn't do that if I worked in a factory + I do the soldering in the kitchen and we have a reasonably good view and I can have the back door or window open so I can get rid of the fumes. ( what more could I ask ). Things have changed in the electronic business over the years.
( we have to use unleaded solder now - though I believe they use leaded for hospital equipment and the M.O.D ). Most of the work goes abroad these days - we are fortunate we do the little hand soldering jobs.

Thank you for your lovely comment Ian - I feel greatly encouraged. I guess Didgit is having a rest at the moment - I'm sure he'll be back with a vengeance! He he

Thanks again - see you soon ( I've got the grandchildren over the weekend + husband has a hospital appointment on Sunday to have a brain scan, but hopefully I'll get a chance to call in on Monday ish ).

In the meantime Keep safe.

Mand xxxx

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yet read.............

better that my soul be flayed
than I rouse the beast within...........................excellent

in the last para did you want to say
where!
I wonder

loved

Mand uses your old Acid flux, in soldering, LOL, and may suffer from your new acid reflux, I am going to my cave for a while,
Yours Ian..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You make me laugh Ian! ha ha - I think you should write a poem about your cave. Lol How are you getting on with the bottom in group? I'm enjoying it - though I think it will take some time for it to sink in. He he

Hope to see you soon.

Mand xxxx

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The bottom is rather flat and not to my liking lol, I love the heart shape and I believe this is where that original heart shape came from LOL.
This shape is missing from the workshop hope it is restored soon a poem on botox might do the trick, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You do make me laugh Ian! :) I'll be away as of tomorrow! I'm truly going to miss you lot.

Keep safe!

Mand xxxx

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Ha ha - I meant bottom Line group. Not bottom in group. Ha ha Fool me!

Mand xxx

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Woow! I can think of no greater compliment than my work inspires creativity in another poet! You've cheered me up no end. I will be by shortly to take a peek. It's soo good to have you come by - you are a gem.

I hope you are o.k and I'll be by in a jiff.

Love Mand xxxxx

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Sorry! I forgot to say thank you for the typo correction!

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fight back!

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

That was funny! :)

Love Mand xxx

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