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looking around in real life
is better than looking at a flat world
seeing all the places you want to go
are better than imagining them
go out into the world and get lost
don't hide behind that paper map
when wandering you don't need any instructions
so don't go try to read them

A line is like a knife cutting a person or a place in half
what would our world be without maps
chaotic and wild
everyone likes to have a set of rules
or a boundary line to stand behind
I would just pack a bag and the clothes on my back
then cross that stupid boundary line
and explore the world it hides behind

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I actually have no critique because free verse is not my forte. :(
However, I would just like to say this poem really touched a chord in me. Beautiful and so true. I love it. Thank you so much for sharing.
Most inspiring.

"To reveal art and conceal the artist is art's true aim." Oscar Wilde

you have done a fine job here. My only suggestion is that in the last line of the first verse, you use [trying] to read them.
Nice stuff! ~ Geez.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

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