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walking on dead flower petals

When they call me delicate
don't underestimate me.
for i am not as delicate as a flower
i am as delicate as a bomb.

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i do have poems i would like to post on here but they as long as 3 pages. thoughts?

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Are the long poems capable of sustaining a reading? If so, post them. I will do a reading for you and post it on SoundCloud (it really helps to hear your work in another voice).

Post them anyway. If they are just to long don't worry, we'll tell you. [grins]

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

i notice that your poems are getting better...as for a 3 paged poem personally i find such poems too large to maintain the context...hear what others have to say...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I love this!!!!! Gives me serious "Milk and Honey" vibes, great job!! I'm only having trouble relating the title to the poem, can you explain it?

thank you for commenting and for the support, the title or dead flower petals are very delicate, but we as humans can be delecate ;ike that sometimes, but we are strong.

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clever

Yeah as delicate as a bomb describes most ladies here in the south lmao.. As to poem length there is no real limit here but I'd suggest posting it in 3 or 4 parts labeled part 1 part 2 and so on .This way it might not be skipped over as being too long.

Eisenstein said of film that it is the art of 'compression of meaning'.
It applies even more so to poetry and you have succeeded.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

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