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Walk in the Garden of Paradise

Walk in the Garden of Paradise

Search in the universe

Mangoes oranges
leaves and trees
compose more about long walks in the breeze
on horseback think of you as a cow boy
with times up your sleeves
like infernal hell

Think of the black hole
you read about yesterday
also about the stars and galaxies
distant away
reminisce of your friends and teachers at school
whom you loved
while some did fool you

Amaze at the Garden of Eden
where guys and gals now go to steal
no, not fruits like in olden days we used to
but pluck real human oranges apples and pears
see how life changes
and with what one dares and compares

dream of what you can
if you could and prove
the world will wonder of a new born
FROST
maybe
a Shakespeare in you...

Do consider
how this poemised version
of the mundane prosaic did do
none helped too

so let me thank
and now recall
will you
the sky is azure
still it’s blue

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

i don't have the intellectual capacity to halt the rhythm of this verse, if i attempt it, it would unmask my own poetic weakness. The strength of poetry jerks the reader to re-read and re-read again. Sir, you have release yourself to write in ways that speak to your readers.

You have explored deeply in poetry... i think muse walks around your corridor. Lol! Your style of writing prompts my emotion to inhabit the same cloud.

Onyinyechi Cosmos

no one has ever used such lovely words for my poetry
with your appreciation you give me a fresh lease of life in neo
thanks again

hope neo's will see
the poetry posted by me

author comment

Hello Lovedly!
I like that the poem is now much richer with images.
You made me travel with your protagonist.
Write on, my friend.

IRiz

on Neopoets this is my last poem
I have been warned to desist posting poetry
trying to earn a name for myself
self seeker me!!!!!

I shall,
be assured...
read all yours
but shall not leave any comments
the management on my account
should not lament
Your kindness

author comment

Oh dear, real world is complex but Neopoet even more so.
I can relate to your troubles, please, keep writing poetry and take a deep breath. Summer is here, soon all the poets will be cooked. Enjoy your inspiration while it lasts.

IRiz

please message me
if i can join your passages
as my time in real time ages
may not last many rages
may be few stages

author comment

I am not sure what you are asking.
Yes, you can comment on my poems anywhere you see them.

IRiz

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