My brother once told me while he was losing his battle with cancer that he was sick and tired of being sick and tired. Yet he battled on even so. Your edit conveys a similar resignation along with defiant resolve. As to the rhyme pattern you cheated a bit by using 5 lines in first stanza (that will be for later shop) but other than that the mid poem change in pattern really kept SS from being established. Well done.................stan

Can't call you a cheater as you've only done it on the first stanza.
Why don't you try the good books , they may help.:)

This poem speaks of hope lost until the last stanza

made me worry for you tbh .... the poem does its best
drawing the reader in so not a total loss

its nice to read everyone again ive missed that spark
that gets the mind and inspiration going

cheers JC

and they lived! amazing larger then life
in the myth

I myself have considered it when the depression
comes down off the rabid highs
the complete creative storm gone
including will and hope or faith

they say thats when you find faith
not until that time
sometimes

sometimes you get it when you have
it all the rolex the accura the trophy wife
I wouldnt know

I value myself though
I start there
like my poetry
which is a part of who Iam

even H Thomspon turned to the American
way with his gun
Burroughs just shot his woman
and with his wealth got away with it

Keep writing
write about pain
nothing like being knackered
and done
to bring out the blues

some of the greatest music
came from the blues
compassionate songs
about Love

Sid slew Nancy

on and on it goes

I just wake up keep going
and continue to write

hope is there
it just has to be found