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Waiting for the Vampire

There’s a gathering
here full of fear.
We all await
our victims' fate
with each meeting
soon to come
with the Lovely One
who wants nothing
but our blood.
She is clever
and deceiving
as She prepares
Her room for feeding,
and She smiles at me
while she pierces
and sinks deep
through my flesh.
My Red flows
into her tubular tooth
and holds it there
to keep it fresh.
After all is said and done,
I part ways with her
and say ‘Goodbye,
until next year then,’
when it’s time
for lab work once again.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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