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Waiting (Steven's blurb)

Submitted by Candlewitch on Mon, 2022-11-07 12:02

Waiting...
Waiting for the waiting to end.
Why am I waiting?

(a thought from my Steven)

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Rula

Mon, 2022-11-07 12:35

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Nice to read you after this long time.
Waiting is an interesting title to draw any reader in for sure.
Sorry I am not familier with "your Steven's blurb."
So I can't help here much, but I would suggest changing "why" with "what" in the last line. Don't know if that makes any sense. Only a thought.

I am very happy to read you again dear.
Thanks for sharing.

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-11-07 12:42

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I am so very happy to be in your company again. you take good care!

*hugs, Cat

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Triskelion

Mon, 2022-11-07 13:00

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...is some serious waiting!

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-11-07 13:26

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I read your comment to him. he smiled his secretive smile ;)

thanks, Cat

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Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2022-11-07 20:00

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The waiting for the waiting to end. That’s a heck of a thing and I sure feel that. As much as it feels bad it usually does end. Problem is, then we are waiting for something too. It’s a beautiful blunder inherent with any level of self awareness I think. Waiting in vain.

With regards
Tim

Candlewitch

Tue, 2022-11-08 06:26

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there is one exception for waiting in vain; waiting to die. an eventuality. thank you for sharing your thoughts, Tim.

regards, Steve

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scribbler

Tue, 2022-11-08 11:30

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Reminds me of waiting for the right deer to come by lol.

Candlewitch

Wed, 2022-11-09 06:12

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I read your response to Steven, his reply was: "yes, I like that! everyone has their own interpretation, which is good." thank you, Stan.

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