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waiting to smile with you

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2015-06-28 12:29

waiting to smile with you

Smiler's follow me
nice smile yours ....
people must be on all fours..
my salutations...
I love all smilers...
you are added on..

Smile is the elixir of life...
that oils the rusted mind...
and
we all then move along....
happily in smiles...

so smile along with me...
as we all walk the poetic mile....
kindly smile all the while...
all you young ones out there
in poetic glare

all young ones
smiles with me do share...

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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alidzain

Sun, 2015-06-28 16:25

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I'll give you more than that. A smile and laughter.

A smile can still be sad
or mocking
it can be mistaken as mad
when its never ending
same goes for laughter
too little, its a joyless life
too much, I'll wonder
if its real or a lie.
Add friendship and its alright
it becomes a beautiful bonding
in a ray of light.
so for you, I'm smiling
and laughing
as I say
thank you for sharing

Alid

lovedly

Mon, 2015-06-29 00:30

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Cancerians r negative try and b more positive
thanks alids

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alidzain

Mon, 2015-06-29 08:54

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Cancerians r negative try and b more positive?

I don't know what you are trying to say. I don't believe the stars have anything to do with people's way of thinking. I'm just writing what I see as truth about smiles and laughter. It's what many people think. lol

Alid

lovedly

Mon, 2015-06-29 09:37

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uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

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Sparrow

Mon, 2015-06-29 14:24

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A beaming is coming on, go for it Bard, now you must get out more, or that mirror will crack,
Yours, Ian..

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lovedly

Mon, 2015-06-29 15:46

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ok fine

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