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Waiting to see

That's why in most of my thoughts
I say
The distant horizon…
I can't see
the sunset shows its lining
and
when the sun has set where ,
I live
my kith and kin awaken

so round the clock
we all keep vigil
waiting to see
the horizon

can you come some day
leave the Thames, Blue Nile
if you may
and
stand besides us to see...
where -in the seashores
wait for none other
except you and me
my friend
life's magical end
in the surfs of imagination do end
till the last we wait and see
finally
we all are going to be at sea.......

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If only he told me where he was, I could really stand there, now we have a quandary, as he is not commenting on my words what do I do.
Shall I ban him to the end of the universe or do I just wait at the entrance to my cave.
The tea is eternally hot, though there is no need to eat or drink, it is just a way of being, where a quiet person stands as all know them, it is a form of manners, so shall I tend the roses that cling to the entrance in hope that you have called or will you learn to think talk quickly..
Go well young Bard, there are some pieces of mine that need your attention lol, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

your pieces all over I find
and then think
ere i spill
from my minds ink

loved

author comment

but don't ever use the word poem in a poem.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

that I relish
and out of my junk
have been able to salvage poetry
more than 51
worthy to be read by knowledgeable teachers like you

my friend
philosopher
and guide
you alone know it
and loved also knew

loved

author comment

You could do better if you did not have such a deluded belief in yourself and bothered to learn how to write poetry.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

as poetry just flows
like rain
in good weather
and
water from homes
into drains
is altogether a different matter
irrespective of weather

loved

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