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WAIT FOR TOMORROW

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2021-12-13 22:08

Wait for the next hour
a new light surfaces
after this morn
as noon presides
wait we twilight
a new night
life moves on
till the new twilight
a newer dawn
a fresher is born

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Jackweb

Tue, 2021-12-14 11:00

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Very instructive, 'wait for tomorrow'.
Someone here being reprooved. Each day births new morning in our life. If life Or nature can't deliver today tomorrow is another brand new day we can achieve our goal.

Therefore patience is a virtue. We must adhere the art of waiting no matter how we want it fast.

Beautiful poem garnished with simplicity.

Bravo Lovedly!

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

lovedly

Tue, 2021-12-14 11:35

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When one is simple
like swards beautify the earth
so should men and women last
as simple ones
to be well understood
no blah blah blaaa

thanks poet

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Jackweb

Tue, 2021-12-14 13:39

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I really enjoyed the concision of the poem.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

lovedly

Tue, 2021-12-14 13:56

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means

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Jackweb

Tue, 2021-12-14 15:30

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Its a writing principle of eliminating redundancy in a sentence. The poem is short. Simple!

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

lovedly

Tue, 2021-12-14 16:27

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google says concision is archaic as jess would say
like ere
is neither here nor there =ARCHAIC
for poetry sake
good education anyways

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Jackweb

Tue, 2021-12-14 20:38

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The word 'concision' is a (noun) which implies briefness and brevity.
2. Concise too, is the same thing. But is all about the usage in a sentence.
Thanks for exploring...

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

lovedly

Tue, 2021-12-14 21:23

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else he'd be us tearing
our older times inners briefs he'd be
exploring these archaic guys

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Triskelion

Wed, 2021-12-15 13:27

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when you look to the sky, what do you see?

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

lovedly

Wed, 2021-12-15 14:39

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only uuuuuuuuuu eeeeeeeee lol and u ?

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Triskelion

Thu, 2021-12-16 02:45

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the top of my mast and a fire from it that tears the sky open, through which the stars tumble down. I think to myself, "how lovedly".

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

lovedly

Thu, 2021-12-16 10:59

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Trisk happy you do read

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