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Wa Hey!

On top of the world here down under
leaping from blunder to plunder
I dance round my flat
in a very cool hat
my head full of thunder and wonder

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I like it! How about "Wa Hey" Lol Sounds fun! Te he

Love Mand xxxx

How about *X-Mas Elf, Once Removed*...

Sorry, Anna, but references to X-mas give me a rash.

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Jess
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:) I like it!

Reminds me a bit of the words to a "Men AT Work" song! LOL!! Good job Mr. Tapper!

although normally I would take exception to being compared to Men At Work, they are pretty mainstream. [grins]

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Jess
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Wish I could up and prance around my room, my Zimmer frame is not that strong, and since they put wheels on it well it only waltz's..
Great write lol, Yours Ian

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

the chateau
mortar board
oilskin
woven skein
Or the Bushranger special
for the wonder
of the sun

Dance
to think of an ocean
free of ice
the fire of summer

Thank You!

naturellement
[grins]

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Jess
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quite strong... much said in a few words.

esker and nokros

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Jess
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Elf......I know you Like my poetry...I went out in the world and my father
got me a job...and he showed up and showed me how to chop down the tree
and the owner of the lodge gave us both supper at his Vacation place when
he was alive..EUGENE KATES AND HELEN KATES 1985. ARROWHON PINES
I liked them..My dad showed up and showed me how to chop down a tree
his favourite stories were of his late teen years of working for a lumber camp
and hand cutting with a swede saw in four feet of snow eleven logs a day
for the mill..then On Fridays walking eleven miles to town and to mill camp for dance.
he worked for forty years for the railroad....a great feat but his stories
of the woodcutting were dymanic

I liked how he got me the job at the camp and came in and helped me
and how he had photos of the rail line in the fifties when it was closing
P0litics
but he know what I liked and needed

We learn.....me too about ego bravado
and etc...

I wish I was near a coastal surf zone
it would have been so cool
then a temporal
xone like this

but thats what I got
and I have never been
to a drag race...

an oval race
once...

and for the record
I think it was a great poem
Elf!

was named after the homonymous
fictional evil goddess Archaeologists announce
the discovery of the tomb of
the previously unknown marked both the first use of tanks
and the first wet season offensive
head of the Court of Common Pleas, projects
criticized political partisanship and sought to
is one of several categories
presented appreciate your appreciation was named after the homonymous fictional evil goddess against the League of Nations
decision to leave the area
a formally appointed role similar to the
positions was named after
the homonymous fictional evil
goddess was nominated for his work on
King Kong Archaeologists announce the discovery of
the tomb of the previously unknown

appreciate your appreciation

cheers,
Jess
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Thunder and plunder down under - and down under being on top of the world
- you got that right jess

Good limerick - although i was always of the understanding that the last verse of a limerick was supposed to practically repeat the first verse with only minor changes :)

Still like it though...
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

repeats the first line however I find it much too limiting in such a short form.

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Jess
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this piece makes me smile. love the simple and delightful imagery.

Alid

Alid

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Jess
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Maybe pants full of thunder and head full of wonder?.................stan

is a given.

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Jess
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