Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

W E A L T H: Fehu [Runic Symbols]

When W e a l t h equals ethics, it lasts endlessly when everything else's lost.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 

Comments

your perception of wealth is pretty strong...I will look forward to how it evolves when you do the edits...i will keep following this...in the mean time I guess you need to correct the spello in the title...
.........................................................................................................

raj (sublime_ocean)

for the correction.
Where else do you think I need to rework?

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Please follow me on Instagram
https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=

author comment

I have a gut feeling that there could be more variations.....let me sleep over this and may be I will come up with a few suggestions for your perusal
....................................................

raj (sublime_ocean)

that these one liners can become good signature lines...don't they?
..................................................................................

raj (sublime_ocean)

absolutely different versions. Does this mean this isn't a good one? And yep for the signature suggestion !

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Please follow me on Instagram
https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=

author comment

i did say that your perception of wealth is pretty strong...didn't I? so get that that thought outta your mind that this is not good enough...ok?
............................................................................................

raj (sublime_ocean)

don't know if this is a good version

When w e a l t h is built on code of ethics, it's hard to end up a pauper
...........................................................................................

raj (sublime_ocean)

thank you. Of course, it's good enough to give me a hint.
Any better now?
Hope i didn't mess as usual

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Please follow me on Instagram
https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=

author comment

Good change Rula
..................................................

raj (sublime_ocean)

for letting me know the changes aren't bad dear raj.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Please follow me on Instagram
https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=

author comment

Hey common Rula! now where this "bad" comes from?...i did say they are good...
.................................................

raj (sublime_ocean)

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.