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W E A L T H: Fehu [Runic Symbols]
When W e a l t h equals ethics, it lasts endlessly when everything else's lost.
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raj
Fri, 2018-08-17 16:01
Rula
your perception of wealth is pretty strong...I will look forward to how it evolves when you do the edits...i will keep following this...in the mean time I guess you need to correct the spello in the title...
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Rula
Fri, 2018-08-17 16:14
Thank you raj
for the correction.
Where else do you think I need to rework?
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raj
Fri, 2018-08-17 16:16
I have a gut feeling that
I have a gut feeling that there could be more variations.....let me sleep over this and may be I will come up with a few suggestions for your perusal
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raj
Fri, 2018-08-17 16:14
Just realized
that these one liners can become good signature lines...don't they?
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Rula
Fri, 2018-08-17 16:25
There are
absolutely different versions. Does this mean this isn't a good one? And yep for the signature suggestion !
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raj
Fri, 2018-08-17 16:27
i did say that your
i did say that your perception of wealth is pretty strong...didn't I? so get that that thought outta your mind that this is not good enough...ok?
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raj
Sat, 2018-08-18 05:52
Hi Rula
don't know if this is a good version
When w e a l t h is built on code of ethics, it's hard to end up a pauper
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Rula
Sat, 2018-08-18 14:08
thank you dear raj
thank you. Of course, it's good enough to give me a hint.
Any better now?
Hope i didn't mess as usual
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raj
Sat, 2018-08-18 14:33
Good change Rula
Good change Rula
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Rula
Sat, 2018-08-18 14:55
Thank you so much
for letting me know the changes aren't bad dear raj.
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raj
Sat, 2018-08-18 15:10
Hey common Rula! now where
Hey common Rula! now where this "bad" comes from?...i did say they are good...
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