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Vocal haiku 1

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Seriously, do you think this might be a path worth pursuing, if I learned a little restraint and effectiveness on the effects?
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It sounded quite eerie - I think it would be very effective - it was like a watery echo - it would be interesting to see how you will/can develop it as a poetic vocal art form!

Love Mand xxx

Mand

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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In my opinion the effects were over done I couldn't understand what was being said I even put the headphones on and still the quality wasn't good enough for me to hear what was being said I will try again later it maybe my connection

take care JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

I agree with JC - it was incomprehensible but has potential.

yep, effects are like garlic, great slave, terrible master. Gonna do an online course because the whole "word sound sculpture" concept intrigues me.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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I always get tremendously excited at the prospect of learning something new or refining my understanding of something. The trouble is that although I'm not tone deaf, I love music, I don't think I have a very subtle ear. Sound tracks were always difficult for me when film-making. Ah well, I do have a good ear for poetry so, nothing ventured etc.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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