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visibility

What do you see when you look at me?
Do you see that I am magical and beautiful?
How quickly do you see my imperfections, flaws, and scars?
The ones on my skin, below the surface
my heart has bandages and stitches.
What do you see when you look at me?
The epitome of hope and resiliency
Are you evaluating and analyzing how I am a risk, asset, or liability?
Are you waiting for an opportunity to call out my next mistake?
Do you see my potential, my wonders, my victories, my complexities?
Do you see concrete walls, broken glass, accessible windows, unlocked doors, open arms, open heart?
What do you see when you look at me?
Do you see my beautiful mess, my organized systems breaking down? A bumpy, confusing, fragile renewal to say the least.
Do you see my needs, my wants, my desire to be desired?
My longing for intimacy, my yearning for space, my craving to take on more, and my fantasy to let it all go?
Have you calculated the ROI of hanging out with me? Do the benefits outweigh the costs?
Do you see I am one month behind and two steps ahead?
I am operating beyond the physical
Count the planes, there are seven, not the drops of water.
Do you see the force field of protection?
Do you see that I see you on my radar?
Now, let's question this objection and attraction.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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This piece is a laid out self analysis, many things pass by your vision each day, it is what you do with those things and how you have been taught to reflect on the effect they have on you.
I always look inward so a lot of the things you seem to have mean nothing to me a dreamer and seeker of all things.
Take care and enjoy your stay with us,
Yours as always Ian.. (Sparrow -- Yenti )

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Thank you, Ian, Sparrow, and Yenti for the warm welcome! I appreciate the Neopoet's learning philosophy and environment. In addition, I appreciate the feedback on the poem, it is a rough draft and I wanted to get the large concepts out of my head. My next step is to make it a bit more abstract and more emotional for dramatic effect.

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