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VIRTUE CRUCIFIED

Prophecy:
messiah long foretold,
that will liberate us at independence;
mountains of tribalism made straight,
blood rivers and streams -
parenting nepotism and corruption,
hysop employed,
like sins he will wash them away

Ignorance:
so sweet like saccharin
like two-edge sword
satisfies glutinous urges
kills the body to no cure;
holds sway in Naija

Buffoonery:
so greedy like weed
like raging fire and brimstone
ravishes a whole nation to the full
nothing is left of it

There comes the light:
to heal, to restore, to reorder
reset values of transformation-
ignored, trapped and judged
taken to the gallow
cheered on by ignoramus
goaded on by buffing lots
crucify him they chant
sacrificial lamb he is

Backwardness:
pliant tool so corrosive
so we are embellished in our prison
leaders and the led
we tow the same path

Messiah is dead:
judged by the led
crucified by leaders
who late last night
partied and drank to stuppor
in a glee of rampant agreement -
away with righteousness!
come along darkness!!

His prophecy:
I hold to heart still
three days gone he will rise again
today is second on the log
hopeful
third day will come to pass
Eureka will knock on our doors

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