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Vindication

Filet Mignon, was an easy choice
Slept on it until that morning voice
"Time Mark, need to shave off that damn shag
No more (this) day for a lousy brag"

So it went, there was still some more time
When suddenly there was a strange chime
Was it something odd one of them said
Or was it from deep inside my head?

What choice did I have left in this world?
Scared, so revolting down tight I curled
Dragged me up to carry me screaming
A boy wanting mommy seeming

Strapped and gagged, a choice - flex muscles
All the times and all deadly hustles
“Relax my boy relax and enjoy”
Thinking a sharp bolt, they will deploy

A dawn came to light, that I could think
Who was that fink that did not so blink
A last choice I knew I had - not bad
So sitting there so quiet and sad

Their guilt too, by assassination
Becomes even my ... vindication

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I enjoyed your fun read. Nothing too deep, simply lighthearted. The rhymed couplets made it all work. Much liked.
Jerry

That was my goal.
Thanks again,

~Mark~
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for someone who doesn't do rhyme very often. A bit of nonsensical horror? I would suggest that you try rhyming every other line next time. It seems easier to do so, [I would imagine it's not as hard to keep the rhyme going without seeming forced.]
~ Geezer.
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It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

And thanks to one of the rhyme masters around here.
Later big Bro,

~Mark~
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