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I dont care if i ever see your face the way u made me feel can never be erased the girl u knew u killed inside and now the one thats here resides she wants revenge for all the pain the needless hurt that u forced her to claim she is different it is tru but cant forget about u because of this simple fact things u did u cant take back the memory she has just wont die and everytime she thinks about it it makes her cry u are the sickist most vile man and i hope the worst things happen to u that can

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
just off the top of my head about a past relationship
Editing stage: 


"u forced, and claimed.."
" she's different. (true)..she can't forget about u!"
"the memory she has won't die..everytime she thinks
about it..makes her wanna cry U are the sickest Vile
man I hope for you to die
And I hope the worst can happen to u can"

I ended up listening to much rap with the kid
who made me sing along to the faster vocalists

that made me realize how things are put together
so you can sing it fast

I like how your poem works and its pretty damn good

I like this a lot!

Thank You!


author comment

Welcome to Neopoet. The emotion comes through clearly although this is structured more like prose than poetry. Your use of "u" instead of you is an example of the effect texting may have on poetry. I guess time will tell whether textspeak will become accepted in poetry................stan

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