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Valentino Dreams
I'll write my very own poetic song,
And STUN the whole world
Singing it on stage, to everyone,
That's where I belong,
I'd wear a Valentino Gown,
Hair tied back in a French bun
Mascara full, lipstick deep red
Chanel blush, stroked upon my cheeks in peach
And oh, let's not forget,
The vintage microphone,
That goes so well, with my personality
Yes, that's me,
A sight to be seen and heard,
I always imagined my four minutes of fame
But oh no wait,
That wasn't four minutes?
It was more like,
twenty-five seconds,
Did you count too?
I didn’t think so, not even for a second.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
i've been walking past a very beautiful boutique for years, the dresses are truly only for women who go on stage, but I cannot help but dream everytime the mannequins get dressed in their new attire, sometimes i really do burst into song too.
alas
(a girl can dream)
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Florence (Italy)
Favorite Poets
Those who have the courage to inspire, Oscar Wilde, Dante Alighieri and William Blake, are definately amongst my favourites.
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Lavender
Tue, 2020-07-21 10:11
Valentino Dreams
Hi, Teddy,
Beautiful! Beautiful, lovely poem! Just do it! Somehow, in some way - just do it!
Thank you for this sweet, sweet poem!
L
Teddy15
Tue, 2020-07-21 11:23
Dear lavender
You have such a kind and encouraging way of showing your enthusiasm towards my stuff, never say never right? As long as we are alive we can do anything.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentinfinite_dwarf
Tue, 2020-07-21 21:59
Nice
I don't know why, but I envisioned one of those roaring 20s flapper girls. There's always Halloween!
It took a few tries, but eventually I was able to somewhat get the cadence for the line about the Chanel blush. The length at first seemed a bit out of place, but after playing with it some, I was able to get it to fit.
Teddy15
Wed, 2020-07-22 07:21
Dear infinite_dwarf
20's flapper girl
(I wish) always loved the hairstyles, and outfits and shoes, oh I could go on.
I guess you are not so familiar with my writing so I understand when you have to read a few times , usually I don't write in code but I know what you mean. It's great to see you and so glad you enjoyed in the end. Ps it's peach meaning colour of the blusher, I guess you got anyway.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentGeezer
Wed, 2020-07-22 00:05
I think that...
you are short-changing yourself, with only four minutes! [I've always heard that it is fifteen]. Anyway, that is what is so great about imagination, you can have as many and for as long as you want in your head. Let me know when your first performance
is and I'll be there! Right in the front row! ~ Geez.
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Teddy15
Wed, 2020-07-22 01:19
Dear Geezer
One of my biggest cheer leaders you are, you so get my mind. Exactly this what you said, imagination. I swear to you that all I have to do is walk past that shop and a moment after I'm walking on stage with my dress on. lol
It's fun to dream isn't it?
Hey this is my stage and you are always here shining it with your thoughtful comments and suggestions
You seem to see right into my writes, whether they are about naughty little boys or Valentino Gowns!
As always a huge thank you.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentGeezer
Wed, 2020-07-22 02:45
I once was...
accused of being a psychic vampire. That I drained the emotion out of them. I guess that I could be. I find that I really love the energy that I get from other people when they are creative. I also am attracted to dreamers and I guess that most poets are dreamers. Not all, there are some out there, that write mechanically or are so enigmatic, that they don't connect with the reader. But the ones who dream... their essence is delicious. Slurp! ~ Geez.
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Teddy15
Wed, 2020-07-22 02:57
Dear Geezer
I know for sure that i prefer the personality of the poet in the write, I hope to always be that type as indeed are you, Robot poets i'm not so fond of, nor am i interested in those who just want to provoke in a negative way, i stay away from those type books. I take your comment as a compliment that you see the inside of who i am. for that i am always grateful Sir, if one other poet can understand you and see beyond the words then we have done a great job showing it. I have recently purchased ( An ode less travelled), its a fabulous down to earth read, that teaches us to be ourselves when we write and not to be affraid of what we write. the most joy is i believed that even before reading it.
Thank you...Teddy
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