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The Valedictorian

She was a sooner-cum-loudly,
the top of her class,
genuine guttural groans
when I'd smack on that ass

and like any boy scout
I was always prepared
when she wanted it done
no level was spared

I'd slow down the roll
like the rest of us should
so I wouldn't let go
till she was all good

... and with a sigh of relief
flipped my hat in the air
I graduated with honor
at the college of Claire.

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hmmm! the wordings are nice , very well hid, if i had a clean mind i would think you had a memorable grad day. but now, i still wonder about the last paragraph. well writ.

Hello, nice to meet you sir

If we had clean minds our moments
would become less than dazzling.

What were you wondering about the last

thank you for reading, commenting and
making me think


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Hope the tuition was not too high to becum a valedickedorian lol......................stan

Ya know ya can't play without payin

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this is so good - i love it

great alliteration and word usage in 'genuine guttural groans'
and rotflmao at 'She was a sooner-cum-louldly' -- but typo here :)

oh poor claire - you shouldn't've named her you cad --- lol
- nice alliteration here too with 'the college of claire'

love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Claire would love it !!!

didn't even notice the typo ... jeeez, old eyes ya know

Thanks Judy

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You sure it wasn't from the college of St. Claire? And did you marry her? Make her an undergraduate?

~you bad boy you, kissin-'an'-a-tellin'!


I can't tell everything, what would I say tomorrow !!!

lovely to see ya Anna

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