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Fairness I search in life's dictionary,
though unfair occupies.
splashy by surprise.
it's dusted of the happiness.
claiming is a pleasure,
but a torture.

love they said is blind,
but wisdom is wise.

the most she loves you
among the multiple,
the child may be yours,
but conceiving is contradicted
D.N.A will shout
and memory brings an update

resemblance neither the father
although the truth stands just
the affair breath the air
but unwanted drowned it all.

life is not always fair
when things turns awkward
but just a lesson.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
An advise to the youths to play safe sex and abstain from unwanted pregnancy or unwanted situation in a relationship.
Editing stage: 


good job but needs more improvement

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

thanks brother for your advise

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