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Unknown Address

I am an unknown address
a cut and paste from me to you
solitude to solitude
an immense intimacy
of intimate immensity
a primitive pleasure

this language of the gesture
sometimes defying convention
dissolving the literal

moving from eye to ear
to inner ear
to inner eye

the reader and writer
albeit short;
a marriage of sorts

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deep thoughts! Yes, I do think it is kind of like a marriage of sorts. But then again, I guess anything that you contact or contacts you is a marriage. It's just that sometimes, it's over before you are ready. This poem was of just the right length, it engaged me with the title, A short courtship with the first stanza and then the body enjoyed and the final stanza with the injection of the ejection; divorced! Nice work, thanks. ~ Geezer.
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Many thanks to for commenting ….Im delighted you like it ;)

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be just as delighted if I hated it. LoL. ~ Geezer.
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haahaahaa..... well not really but Id have to roll with it wouldn't I :)

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thinking that I've seen you spend just as much time engaging in discourse about an opposite point of view as if a shining accolade. You roll well, with whatever comes your way. I like that. ~ Geezer.
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Thank you my friend ….I try....Most all have good intensions here and one tries not to take oneself to seriously,,,Its also often interesting to see others point of view and I have learned a lot

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