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UNKNOWN.

If you search for me
One day to find me gone
You found me long ago
For I am where
I've always been
Standing beside you
Clearing a path
For your journey
Of which I've passed through
For I am a shadow
In the darkness of light
And here is where I'm captured
Somewhere in the unknown
Of which there is no fear
For the sun's warmth
That I no longer feel
I guess it is
That I am
When I see it
Reflected upon you.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

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I found these lines to be haunting:

FOR I AM A SHADOW
IN THE DARKNESS OF LIGHT
AND HERE IS WHERE I'M CAPTURED
SOMEWHERE IN THE UNKNOWN
OF WHICH THERE IS NO FEAR
FOR THE SUNS WARMTH
THAT I NO LONGER FEEL

that is some fine writing!

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

i'm enjoying the wistfulness of this piece.

I have to ask: is your caps lock key stuck?

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No cap keys not stuck, just being lazy. i have had 3 strokes and a bit forgetful so I find it easier but sorry I was not thinking about the readers. I am only knew to this and my spelling and typing is probably the worst you will come across. I mostly write to try and improve my spelling and grammar. Thank you, Chris Stuart.

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