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Unfulfilled Dreams

I have bags and bags
Of wonderful dreams
But nowhere left
To put them

There isn't even any more room
In the back of my mind

Alas
Nowhere else
For them to go...

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Dear Teddy, short and sweet! Love your poem. If you have nice dreams to spare, you can send them over to me. As far as I know, they're inmaterial and occupy no space. Oh dear, I've let the cat out of the bag...lol.
Enjoyed, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

LOL always a pleasure to see you.

Thank you...Teddy

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that it is time to get rid of the old ones that didn't work out and install the new ones! After that comment, I would point out that
you have written a great, short poem that resonates with me and I suspect, any number of readers. It is short, to the point and
makes me think about my own dreams and what to do about the new ones that are showing up. I love that you have made it so that I wonder what dreams you might have had that you are not willing to let go of, so that the new ones can move in? Nice job. ~ Geez.
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So kind of you to see so much my friend. In fact it's the (unfulfilled dreams) just as my title says that I have, that I cannot throw away in the hope one day
they may come true ( wink) that's why I have no space to keep any more. X

Thank you...Teddy

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our sweet friend Teddy
The line
"There's not even any space"
would read better as
"There ain't any space"
But that's only me

Believe in yourself and your dreams dear.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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I can say that I don't particularly like ain't in my poems simply because it isn't something I would say even though I am a Londoner, but I take your point and am forever grateful for your lovely thoughts. X

Could use (there isn't even any space)?
I like it better what do you think? Thank you for.making me think more. X

Thank you...Teddy

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It's always your poem and your call.
You are welcome dear.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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I have edited, you made me pay more attention and I like it better so thank you. X

Thank you...Teddy

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