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UNDERGROUND CLOWN

The Date on my calender is crossed off
and my GLOCK and two 9MMS are ready
to be cocked back

and it's time to get going after I've danced
to this last track

I put the sawn off shotgun in my back pack.
And make tracks

I have cut my wrists and as it drips ill smudge
it on my lips

my makeups done and I'm ready to have some
fun.

I'm drinking the last bit of vodka then I'm going
to get
into my Nova

I'm so sick of this world so there's gonna be a
massacre.
I don't care about the aftermath I'm looking forward
to the
blood bath

Everyshot I fire every SCREAM I hear all the RAGE
and all
the years

your going too feel my TEARS my PAIN my nose is
full of
cocaine

and I'm ready to get the train. Iam going to hell not
heaven

Right weres platform 11. all the stares all the talking
behind
my back

Like I'm nothing but a helpless mouse in a rat trap.
This is the
way

The only way I'm not backing down come on you
fuckers I've got
you now !

you will have to take down the clown you laugh at there's
no going

back
Rat a tat tat. As I pull out my GUN someone's already
shouted run !

I've been shot in the shoulder I need to gt too cover it
must of

been POLICE OFFICER UNDERCOVER! .as he calls for
back up

I stick out my arm and fire a few rounds back

I catch him as I'm crouching down right in his KNEE
CAP as

He falls too his knees I Squeeze . The second BULLET
travels

as he falllling penetrated deep into his SKULL . I stop
firing I hear

the sirens

Back behind the cold dusty pillar I wait like a trained
sniper

I look in my ruck sack for my two 9MMS . I hear a voice
not far

from a meter !
DROP the GUN We can talk about this its not over it can
be FIXED !

you made a

MISTAKE For FUCK SAKE it Happens !. RIGHT ! I shout
BACK in ANGER
I'll put my

Hands UP and we will all LIVE HAPPY EVER AFTER ? Ok
I'm coming Out !
Don't make

Me doubt put yours DOWN too ! I took one gun behind
my back

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