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Under the mistletoe

 

 

 I have met somebody on a dating site and she's a bit younger

she's like a bright star on  a cold dark black  night . a glimmer of hope 

a warm cosey hug  on my cold body all feeling snug

my problems disappear sometimes when we're together

We met in November  it's 

Now December  I'm know longer a loner

and instead of my 

Heart getting colder

it's has started to become a bit warmer 

I have become a little less frozen I stood out from a dozen

Now  Iam at hers  she's  cooking a roast dinner and now it's in the oven .

The warmth of the fire  and the logs crackling and I'm helping my self to some pork scratchings .

as its digesting  going down to my guts I'm helping myself to some cashew nuts l lay back on her couch having a think my hands clasp holding a drink  

Before this we had a wet warm kiss I grab her behind to claim she's mine

outside the window the backdrop of  snow under the tree as I holded a mistletoe 

I know this feeling won't last forever but for now we're together

Last few words: 
Really rough sketch needs alot of editing and a use of punctuation for now it's still in the making
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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I have no idea how to use paragraphs and other stuff at the moment On the computer so I'm learning . Believe me I know its bad lol

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Rough sketch

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is pretty good. I like the rhyming parts the most. You seem to have a natural skill for rhythm, too. I added this to my watch list so I can follow your edits.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

Thank you not taking it too serious just letting ideas roam and having fun

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Each line is connected. The rythm is sound. You maintained coherency in the poem. The idea is unified without any ambiguity.

This is a senerade poetry. The two love birds meets here. I love the presentation.

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

Thank you yes the flows important to me and getting the reader involved and taking them there

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Yep you need to first check for spelling then go from there. You just THINK this one is rough. The first poem I tried to post was gobblegook due to my lack of typing skills.But don't worry plenty of people here to help you along.

I just had to write it down at first . Then when I have time I'll go back and paragraph it etc

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