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Unconditional Love Supreme

While making my way towards the vista
I kept looking at the sky,
I wondered where the time had gone
and I also wondered, "why".

Why'd it pass so quickly?
I still had things to do!
It's sort of like some kind of trick
fate plays on me, and you.

I've found solace in the sunshine
and love dancing in the breeze,
I've no quarrel with the shadows
for they hide me with such ease.

I've had great companionship
it's not in me to complain,
as for what they might think of me
I guess some might call me, sane.

Whenever I sit by myself
my brain goes into overdrive,
and I have to give thanks to god above
for all that makes me feel, alive!

My family and my true friends
know me past "doc", my nickname;
they know of my strengths and weaknesses
and claim to love me just the same.

There were times I struggled
and many moments of despair,
but I always remembered feeling
that there was always someone, there.

I've shared my many footprints
with others, along the way;
some continued on thier journeys
a select few decided to stay.

I've caught good friends in half-truths
had lovers that both stole, and lied;
can't say I'm closer to understanding
lord knows, I've seriously tried.

My faith in individuals
soars straight past a train of thought;
and sometimes, continuing to love them
takes everything I've got!

If an unconditional love supreme
be our focus, and ultimate goal;
hopefully, keeping our noses clean
won't stain our collective soul.

All in all I've been real fortunate
considering I reside in a house of glass;
and if you don't think that'll take it's toll
then you can bloody-well kiss my ass!

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The whole piece is a smooth talk of what you are, or influence you have,
A full life with many things to touch your mind, these from the sound and run of this piece have been an asset to your Spirit.
Life is not easy and the lessons to learn are sometimes so hard.
I can see by the last line that you have succeeded in your tasks, and that you are a very good Man to all that pass you by, now all you need to do is write true about your ways..
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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