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The Ultimate Design

This is always on one’s mind
where to consolation find

.''Where to go with you today
Your house or mine just fine ''anon''

as long as we both entwine
that is the ultimate desire divine
to swim in your ravine
let rivers flow from mine
to and within nature to shine
ere the summer ends
and we forget the golden mine
where then together we ought to dine
reverberating thoughts of the ultimate design

your velvety body
with a sandy hairy one of mine
we all together embrace
then sip some red wine

the finale must remain
a memory of ecstasy
yours and mine

{Jess Liked and edited this}

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
A POEM COMPOSED SIX YEARS AGO COURTESY IAN AND JESS BOTH MY BEST MENTORS THEN RIP
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I like this poem very much! your rhyming is superb and keeps it fluidly moving! a good write!

p.s.
I know that Jess is gone, and I miss him. Is Ian gone, too? such a shame!

*hugs, Cat & eddy

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"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

do you remember Jess and Ian
They I miss for their guidance
may they RIP
wherever souls.... if any do

author comment

It's been some time since I have been here, and I am back to see such a great poem.

The rhyming lulls the reader into a dreamy state and fills them with ecstasy.

wonderful piece.

and thanks
do read and enlighten me and all as much

author comment

Of the two you mentioned.

I found the piece very full of sex energy, and thus had my full attention! LOL.

Cery well written, the imagery supurb.
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