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An Ugly Girl

I am an ugly girl in pretty clothes
They compliment my lipstick
But wince at the sound of my voice
She loves the dress I wore today
If only it didn't show the scars on my knees
He thinks my shoes are just perfect
But can't see how they blister my clown feet

It's not as if I haven't tried
My heart's been in a toilet bowl
My fingers in my throat
But I'm afraid some girls aren't meant to be pretty
And it seems the biggest offender is me

I'll do what I can to keep them close
Even if I am an ugly girl
They'll stay for my pretty clothes
But when my most darling top begins to tear
And I've run out of thread to sew it up
I'll have to learn to be alone

Another ugly girl abandoned,
Isolated on her own planet,
Would certainly be nothing new

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Free verse
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Comments

Really enjoyed this. I think we all have traits inside we dislike but do our best to hide from the outside world.

We have to accept who we are but if we chose to show it or hide it, that's our choice.

I'm sure you'll be told your beautiful inside & out by some but we all know the truth & those words don't help us to believe it. We have to find a compromise & deal with it.

Brave write & my favourite line was the punching "Another ugly girl abandoned,
Isolated on her own planet."

Enjoyed.

Regards

One

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

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I enjoyed you poem, even though it made me sad, my mother used to tell me I was ugly and plain. she would say, "why couldn't you have been pretty like your two sisters!" when someone repeatedly calls you ugly or stupid, it is hard to believe that you aren't. even if you can't believe you are pretty, you have a good heart!

*hugs, Cat

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look for the beauty within. All of us, one way or another have our own version of "The Ugly Girl".

The internal quest for truth, results in a real beauty, that radiates outward to everyone else.

This is where you poem took me.

Please post more of your work!

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I have gone from believing myself ugly, to egotistical looking in the mirror and thinking that "Hey you get better with age!" LoL
We all have those fears and what we think of as truths. Even those that we would say are vain, and narcissistic. They have the fear that down deep, there are those that think them ugly of heart. I couldn't have said it better than Ray. You have written a moving piece that delivers! ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

beautiful poem nerd face we’re gonna talk about your feelings later

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