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A Type of Poem of Self-Importance

I've noticed that there are quite a few
of these types of things....everywhere,
and from what I've seen, this much is true
they're not serious enough, that I should, care;

Of course, I'd never just, "up, and say"
that every day's a walk in the park,
but....assumptions, and expectations, on each day
can litterally turn a reality....."stark"!

A day in the exactly, "right"
not a millisecond past the day's end!
Try, as you you use all your, "might"
one can't alter a long-standing "trend".

Hotter air, or a sizeable, "drama balloon"
may be the "jacket", that's hung on the "day",
but, "we" choose the words, and consider the "tune"
the whole world could care less, either way!

It's usually one's personal perception
that simply "blows".....clear, out of range,
familiar bridges, in, every direction....
...where self-importance, will surely, "derange"!

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I can feel this as you wrote it and would love to come back and visit it again with a clearer mind. Run through your spell check on it. There are a couple of places in that section. Hope all is well by you and hello to your Mom. Doc

Love Mona

I am not a huge fan of using so many ellipses in a poem, it detracts a little from the piece and with a rhyming piece it's much easier if it flows without those, I found some of it to be a little off in its meter but nothing a little editing and perhaps reading out loud can't fix :)

"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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