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Twilight at dawn

Tonight let my mind free
to wander beyond eternity
and collect the sweet nectar
from bees aliens maybe
beyond the distant dusking horizon
the twilight of my life
be the birth
of another awesome morn
across the wild oceans
where man and humanity seek to meet
as the sunrise at dawn tweets
the arrival of a newer born
ere the twilight is once again torn
so let me be the for binger of peace
for all humanity
and trace my footsteps upon times domain
to show light to handle
a living darkness
what light twill be
I can’t yet see,
let a newer dawn
once again
awaken me

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Free verse
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the way I have read this one...you have tried to profile the inner commotion to make a life worthwhile and be a harbinger of peace..

regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

and beautiful
I thought twill be a neck breaker
but you have just garlanded it
thanks raj
it was a way
out of my routine trash

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No, what you have attempted is not trash but more like guiding a river of your thoughts to an estuary.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

slur
just scroll over
on the other site
many have admired
they also r poets
no nonsense kind ....raj
be sublime

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They find depth in the depths of nonsense.
Really, you could at least try to make sense.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

I have tried this, but I just fill it with "ands" and "buts". A little strange, but not bad...

W. H. Snow

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shall
and and but it
where necessary

A long winding sentence ...twas .
Thanks for the visit
Snow

loved

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