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Twas Heaven

Submitted by loved on Sun, 2012-03-04 01:42

I was actually in heaven
for five minutes
lost in memory
some one had forecast
i'd come back
so I did...
yes it was a real rebirth
but i shall call it an awakening
only I was in the hills
under a machine
ripped apart
and
then the tree
held it
till I was apart

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Willy

Sun, 2012-03-04 20:23

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loved this piece...... especially the title and the opening line right after it:

Twas Heaven

i was actually in heaven...............

yes it was actually heaven and i was there. How much more forceful can you be.
That piece remind of of a song called "bionic Man" by Maestro.

You know i reading your piece and a flood of memories came rushing as it took me back to the time when that song came out

Willy

loved

Sun, 2012-03-04 20:44

loved's picture

I am not much into music, but I know

Human life is cyclic
what goes, comes around
we all have observed the snows melt,
gorge down rivers and streams
then take flight as invisible,
as invisible can be
and
then reach for the sky and back
to the hills, home,
that's why after so many years
so many have called me
an incarnation
a bard and so on
now perhaps Maestro .
How I wish I were one,
even a trace would do
but all that I now can say
is I adore you.

loved

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