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Turtles demise

Sacks of plastic rising from the ocean
Lining this magnificent view with the ugly truth

I found a turtle today
awkwardly lying sideways on the sand
goggle eyed and lifeless

I tried to wipe my eyes of the painful tears I was crying
so I could see long enough to cut the plastic bag
that had wrapped itself around sea turtles neck

Longing to free this beautiful creature from its inappropriate discomfort
hands shaking frantically whilst trying to take a breath

but it’s too late.

Gone is another beautiful magical turtle of the sea
I couldn't help but think
It would have been better off as soup, some dignity being better than none

oceans fury sending waves crashing to the shore
as if it wanted to swallow land

Long gone are the days
I used to watch these extraordinary turtles from my little wooden boat

Flying like gracious birds under the clear blue aquamarine waters
gliding so fast it was always a treat to actually get a glimpse of their pure magnificence

Gone are the days I could teach my grandchild
the beauty of mothers nature.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How does this theme appeal to you?
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I was inspired to write this today after reading "May competition" it's not an entry....feel free to knock me on my bottom!
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Not Explicit Content

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You need to check for typos ( imagine ME telling somebody else this lol). Did you know the reason turtles and plastic bags don't mix? Sea turtles relish jelly fish and are immune to their sting. Unfortunately they often mistake floating plastic bags for these jelly fist and in trying to eat them they become entangled. BTW a good glimpse of the results of ocean dumping

I could never win a spelling bee. lol
So I have corrected I hope. Feel free to point them out everything helps. And thanks for coming by and leaving such a thoughtful comment.

Thank you...Teddy

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that you don't want to enter this into the May contest? It fits all the parameters and I'm sure it has as good a chance as any. Nicely done. ~ Geezer.
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Thank you for your kind words. I wasn't so sure of the line count to be honest. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.

Thank you...Teddy

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3rd stanza 2ns line
I tried to wipe my eyes
etc
see if you like this a bit better
I tried to wipe my eyes
of the painful ters I was crying
it runs a bit smoother
also Mother Natures tear rather than mother's nature

and it is not too late to enter this

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

thank you! somehow you always see the bits that i have the most trouble with, already edited so much happier with that.
mother's and mothers i really wasnt sure as i've seen it both ways on the internet thank you for your very helpful review and help.

Thank you...Teddy

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