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Turtledove’s Lament

I hear the sweetest “Coo-coo-rooo,”
The calling of a turtledove.
No doubt, she’s asking, ‘Who are youuuu?’

I coo, “Are you the dove I love,
The one who’d fill my feathered nest
With bliss, and preen my love-filled chest?”

But now I hear one “coo-coo-rooo,”
Announcing prior ownership.
In sadness I coo my ‘Adieu,’

Lament this star-crossed bird courtship,
And fly away to distant trees—
No more to “coo-coo-roo” my pleas.

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Structured: Western
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This is a nice poem. You are a great poet. Good job!
Have a good dayy!

and thank you kindly for your super nice comment. I'm so very pleased you read and liked my poem. Thanks, again.
Jerry

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is okay, it gives the sense of the poem. Language use is good and the rhythm is very good. I like the theme and share your
love for the courtship of the Turtledove. We have Doves here and they make great music in the early morning.
The beginning is good and the ending good, but sad. All in all a nice take on the courtship of Turtledoves! ~ Geezer.
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Thank you, Geezer.
Thank goodness turtledoves aren't pigeons, lol. They are too darned prolific--and such messes they make. Glad you like my poem. Jerry

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I really enjoyed reading this outloud. Great poem and use of sounds

Thanks for sharing it
LG :)

for your LargeGift of reading and commenting. Indeed, reading a poem aloud is a good idea. Thanks for liking it. Jerry.

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