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Turning the Pages (January Contest)

While setting the calendar on the mantle
the past fades ever so slowly
I clutch hard on memories
till they too recede like low tide
leaving behind
pebbles and shells
scattered along the shores
some smooth some frayed
like memoirs etched
on pages of my diary
to be shelved

I'm startled from a reverie, when
the wind chimes,
church bells and crickets
strike the score of do re me
at the stroke of midnight....
(Part 1 ree verse)

Looking back is history
future holds the mystery
weeks, months remain the same
keep coming again and again

Nukes may rule the roost
while peace needs a boost
everyone knows that for sure
hope this year holds some cure

Pages of my diary are craving for the ink
will it be less of grey and more of pink?
time has now come to refill my pen
with more of hope and less of pain
(Part 2 Structured Western)

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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Good adherence to contest parameters. See, trying a different form didn't hurt Too much lol. Good luck in contest.....stan

writing the same poem
in both free verse and western classic.

or similar ????

Stan there is a doubt hence
I'd had to stay out

I thought the parameter was fairly clear :same poem in 2 forms

Are you saying mine doesn't conform to the contest parameters?


raj (sublime_ocean)

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my stand stands nullified.
It's perhaps the essence that matters raj
you r greatest i know on neo

Thanks Stan..always good to hear from you..

Warm regards..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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My reading. Join Facebook, upload and image and I will post it there with your permission.

Neopoet Directors

Many thanks for the read and offer. I will let you know as soon as I open a facebook account..


raj (sublime_ocean)

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