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The Tunnel (primal poetry phase 2)

The drum, the only drum
Slow relaxation
Irregular breathing
Regular breathing
Slow breathing
Shallow breathing
I am barely alert
Above dreams
I am in a tunnel
I become the tunnel
Shifting sided to side
Up and down
Images appear
Some are held for moments
Some come and go as a dream
Feel suspended
Then not suspended
Focus
Is there something to see?
I am in a tunnel
The tunnel is me
Feel the movement
That is all
That is the focus
The movement
Through the tunnel
There is no opening
There is no window
I am the tunnel

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

have been really impressive. And it seems to be working for you.

This being Phase two I have to ask what was your guide word or phrase for this one and how do you interpret it in relation to that?

cheers,
Jess, Neopoet Directors
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

IIt's not Shamanic drumming it's called "The Healing Drum- African Ceremonial and Ritual Music".
Try to find it or we need to find a way to do large file transfers. Because, like me, you have aa noisy head I think it might help. It introduced me to one of my spirit guides, lion.

cheers,
Jess, Neopoet Directors
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

I just needed to find the tunnel, Jess.
Now that is done and my mantra will be tunnel up.
It was there all the time I just needed to recognize it.
I do need to be in the right mind/body place though.
Later,

~Mark~

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