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Tuffy

Reading our books in bed in the early evening
You, a favorite murder mystery
I think you’ve read three or four times
Me, another damn poetry book

Together, we hear a forlorn cry
from one of our sleeping dogs. It was high pitched
So, it must have been from our little guy

We check them both to be sure they are okay
And they are. He probably had a bad dream
You wonder why our little brown fella
felt so sorrowful in his dream
and fret about what you can do
to keep him from being that despondent again

You worry about it for some time
before returning to your book
And this is how I know I love you

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Comments

of a committed relationship, that brought me a spot of warmth! Thanks, ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

It is exactly these types of small things upon which lasting love is built. Hmmmm...."that despondent" ....maybe "so despondent"?

Thanks for stopping by Scrib!

Funny you should point that out. I changed that very word 3 or 4 times before publishing this. I eventually went with "that" because I wanted to keep the perceived state of despondency isolated to the specific event and moment that spawned this piece. When I tried it with "so" it seemed, to me at least, that "so" might imply that Tuffy was regularly or still despondent - tomato/tomahto maybe??? Does that make sense? I don't know, LOL!

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Michael Anthony

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