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Trump's American Plan...

Trump's American Plan...

We really have no plan
To keep you all from dyin'
But ditch Obama's Care
I've got your back, not lyin'

Hey! I'm not telling lies
Though they're untruths for you
I stretch the facts, to make my own
I'm a scientist too!

There is no global-warming
Cars and coal are cool
I'll bring back the jobs
GM will stay for you

I can't stand POW's,
They ain't heroes to me
They got captured, went to camp
Heroes, they stayed free

No collusion, I'm not guilty
No obstruction of a crime
I don't care what they say
I didn't leave no sign

Just don't let me down, you rats!
There'll be pardons all around
Except the lyin' rascals
That tried to take me down

When I lose the Oval Office
I'll have to flee this country
They'll be waiting on my doorstep
Subpeonas all for me

I'll have a pent-house ready
In my Russkie Tower
I'll need a place to hide away
When I don't have no power

So, how about them Arabs?
Let them buy a penthouse too
I could use some friendly neighbors
Putin, I love you

Vote for me anyway
I may win again
Maybe they are stupid
Haven't learnt their lesson

We'll see if they remember
All the lies I've told
Hope I can recall
Where I've hidden all my gold

Cause the rich get ever richer
The poor get poorer yet
Keep the peons down, you guys
Don't worry 'bout the Vets

Oops, I made a little crisis
Down the Mexican way
The border's stopping immigration
They're all illegal I say

Hold them all in camps
Please don't let them pass
If you want to keep them
You can kiss my ass

Do it my way, or off you go
I don't care much if you do
But right here, I'll let you know
I will fire you!

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Structured: Western
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Nice sum up.
Firing is mainly what he's accomplished.
Great point there too. He'll need to hide someplace far away.
The last line had me think awhile..fire, burn, bombs ..nuclear bombs
My god! What if?
I always thought a woman may be too soft if the time ever came but never thought; What if a crazy had access to the trigger?

2020 can't come fast enough but I have a feeling the choices will be as difficult as the last one. Go figure huh?

A magnetic read on my part, Geezer.

~Mark~

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Yes, it is going to be a hard decision, but at least we know that whoever it is that gets in, it will be better than a President that tries to divide the country and use scare tactics to make everyone afraid of
ANY immigrants! I just can't bear to think of how bad it could be if he gets re-elected! He has lied and said things that he knows are untrue, just to get people going and pit us against each other, so that no one notices what trickery he is up to. ~Geezer.
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I completely disagree with your poem's premise but I enjoyed the flow and rhyming

writing a poem in rebuttal? ~ Gee.
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You know I almost never let politics make their way into my poetry

I understand. ~ Gee.
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do mix, as Auden suggestion. While I'm 101% on board with the theme, as are 99.9% poets, artists, conservative intellectuals, any one with an ounce of compassion and commitment to the American dream, the poem serves its purpose- to amuse us with the obvious with clever rhyme. It is a function of poetry. Rhyme sticks, and can amuse us too, like Shel Silverstein or Spock.we all sometimes need to write like this, and read things like this to sooth our wrath.

On the handful of poets who would "disagree with your premise" like Campbell did with Franco and Pound with Mussolini, history remember them first as Fascists, not poets. The writer has posted nothing everyone doesn't know as fact. History judges fools as fools. To be part of it is to act the fool.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

and the frustration of people who need someone like Trump. ~ Geezer.
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but ya had to ask; Where's the money gonna come from?
And; How could he accomplish his platform when there is balance of power.
Still though, enough voters had faith in positive change.
I for one agree with your theme, Geezer, even though there may be a premise to some.

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it is enough to make people think about who is guiding the country and how it is being steered. ~ Geezer.
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I agree with Mach2. Your combination of rhythm and alternative spelling is creative and attractive to this reader. I did hope to see that style a bit more consistent; e.g. the last line of the tenth verse...'learnt' their lesson instead of "learned", don't worry 'bout the Vets instead of "about". These are only minor suggestions for an otherwise excellent piece. Also, the theme is right on spot!

Marthalyn

I appreciate the critique and comments. I thought about it, and decided you were right about the two little changes that you suggested. I have made the changes and agree that they help keep the poem in character. As to the theme, there are many more that agree with you and I about how this President is running the country. Yes, the economy is good, employment is better and the Dow is up, but all the promises that have made the economy good, are empty promises. He has shifted money and blame all over the board and sooner or later, the people will find out that he is nothing but a scam-artist.
~ Geezer.
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hadn't thought of what Trump's gonna do when the gig is up. very creative and entertaining poem.

I'm sure; from the last few days of watching the news, that he is going to have a very difficult time when he isn't re-elected. It was kind of tongue in cheek, [a joke] when I wrote that he may have to flee the country, but, I'm not so sure now! Well, we shall see. ~ Geezer.
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