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Tremulous memories

Submitted by Edna Sweetlove on Sun, 2020-07-19 12:49

My dazed shiverings last all the day;
And my weeping at night makes me ever-wakeful.
Nothing matters in the silence of emptiness,
Endless sighing in the black void of nowhere.
Yet I am not alone in this I know, for there are
Tears pouring from so many other raw-red eyes
In other empty houses throughout the world,
And they accompany me in identical pain,
But hopefully I shall soon see some semblance
Of a light at the end of the black tunnel.
Either that or I have severe indigestion tonight,
Thanks to over-indulgence in battered fish 'n' chips
And my haemorrhoids are playing up a bit as well.

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Dandini

Wed, 2021-01-27 12:22

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Another "undiscovered work, ignored for over 7 months! Not as good as the Moses one I just read - indeed it's a bit depressing but the last line cheered me up.

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Wed, 2021-01-27 14:01

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Dandini

Thu, 2021-01-28 11:39

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I must try and find some more pieces. Thanks for the tip.

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