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TRAVEL IS MUST

You are a very
intelligent teen
I had once been

travel makes us wild
and wisdom wise wide
you have that acumen

inculcated may be
to me it came naturally
so I ask all who read me

come
and
Abide With Me

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Hi, Lovedly,
In most of your poems, I usually find a few words that could stand alone - a poem in and of themselves. "I ask all who read me, come and abide with me." I think that's exactly what most poets want and need.
Thank you,
L

I'm not quite sure of what you mean Can you elaborate what is lacking in my poems pl Thanks

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Hello, Lovedly
So sorry I wasn't clear. I meant that sometimes there are a few words within a poem that are so profound, they strike me as a poem by themselves. I didn't mean that the rest of the poem is lacking, just that "I ask all who read me, come and abide with me" really stood out and touched me.
Thank you!
L

This poem really touched me, and especially the last few lines. Beautiful thought.
~

"To reveal art and conceal the artist is art's true aim." Oscar Wilde

thanks

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