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Tras-os-montes revision

Each language comes with set of "sensibilites"foreign to many other cultures,and largely not understood. I wrote the following "poem"in continental Portuguese, the language of the FADO [see below]. I found myself going in a direction I didn't intend. The language brought me there.No Brazilian would ever have written anything like this, nor would they have understood it.There is a '"streak'" in my own writing n English that comes from a similar place.Neither is very appealing and often misunderstood as melodrama,which, in fact, it just may be.But poetry tells who we are.

Trás-Os-Montes

faz um milhão de anos

parece que

deixei os vales

trás os montes altos

acima do mar

onde a lua amarêla pålida

faixas de vermelho escuro

sangra noite

e a chuva entristece dia

Há lugares nêste mundo

onde vai a natureza

a chorar sua tristeza

lugares que seguem

o coração

onde quer que va

TRAS-0S-MONTES [ a harsh mountainous region in north-west Portugal]

I left the valleys

across the mountains

high above the sea

where the pale yellow moon

with streaks of deep red

bleeds the night

and a cold rain

saddens the day.

There are places in this world

where Nature cries her sadness.

Places that follow your heart

wherever you go

FADO

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Each line speaks volumes to me and the last stanza is so special.
I would only suggest to make clear breaks for a smoother read, but it is great anyway.
Thanks for sharing.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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Thanks, Rula. I will work on that

Joe

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profoundly beautiful in its simplicity you really have a way of saying so much with so few words

as always a pleasure

there is always a minute sense of pain that I feel underlying each word it maybe just me eh ?

love your Jayne xxxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

You read me well. my Jayne. Yes.

with love from your Joe

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Although you say this place is rugged and harsh Joe
It is a place of beauty held within your words.
Keep that place with you Joe, it is as my cave.
A place to feel safe from anything no matter about its physical form.
There you can call your loves to meet you and talk with you.
Find a spot there that is bathed in sunshine,
The eternal sunshine that has driven you all these years..
Loved it, can I borrow it if you don't really like it???
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I wish I were there now.

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Your thoughts are strong enough to take you there and to build that special place.
Then I shall expect an invite to walk there with you and to talk of true life.
Go well young Joe and know we think of you,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I struggle every day to "maintain"". Broken hip, parkinsons, I am alone and need to see to my own needs. I hope to get back to total mobility by March, but the loneliness is deadly.

joe

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