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transformation vs transmigration revision

you all have transformed,
a non- poet to one
and
now you
quote

out of many poems,
composed
can't yet find fifty-one
to enclose in a book form

can someone salvage!
identify the ones
which across the internet shall spread
as all earnings if any
will be Cancer’s kitty
have no pity,
read upon my souls transmission,
heaven has sent me on this mission

for man is born to die one day,
more unfortunate ones
go the cancer way.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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One good one for each 149?
Good gem hunting! They are there.

cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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stay away ok

why r u irresistable >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

loved

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I said the gems are there.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

I hate to say this, though you have a hard time from our Weirdelf (Jess) we must all admit, due to his persistent comments (Not all taken well) we change and evolve into writers that think a little more about our work, before we post.
Your words over the time I have known you, have become much better and the tip of the iceberg (Young Bard) shows as we have progressed, with Jess there as an irritant, come poetry guru.
You have the works there young poet and the time to sort out from all your works, how to select and then send out to be published. All my life I may have grossed around $500 for all the writing I have done but that is not the reason for writing.
I write because of others influence and my feelings of a variety of things, now the children and the philosophies
they have given me.
Many things are learned through arguments and having a run in with someone.
I have put a few shots across Jesse's bows and he has acknowledged that there are other things in life other than perfection in Poetry and that us You and me write on the fringes of his world of perfection.
If there were NO us then who would ever be able to judge poetry.
We are not going to move mountains with our words, but one thing we do, is to make the great greater, and the worse, feel better that they can Attain a better level.
Now young Loved write up your works, look at the poems one by one, select those you think are your best then look again, through the eyes of another that will let you see the best ones to use.
I am at the moment putting all my works on a web site that is:- yenti.co.uk if you go there you will see that there is a category called Edit these are the ones that I will have to sort out later, before that I will take each category and Edit each poem as they come up.
This will take a year or so as there are hundreds to go into the Edit let alone the other places.
Now come on give our teachers their dues and let them in to teach.
I hope that this is not a bad thing to say to you but we all have to learn, and from your works I have learned a few things but don't tell Jess LOL, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

'''''.....but we all have to learn, and from your works I have learned a few things but don't tell Jess LOL, Yours Ian.T'''

I too have,
but often I do let all know,
let alone J E S S
Thanks perpetual...

loved

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"I see you Young Bard"

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

In imagination
With a rife mind,
You may perceive,
The young bard,
In his original shape
Despite one's ordained
Anonymity...

loved

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Ian is right, my friend. There were tines I couldn't write because of some harsh critiques.I've been bashed, smashed and pulverized, but I did learn something.

So it all does work out for your betterment in the end, But rememb er the valid points and work from there. No evaluation is always correct. It is for the most part a personal ,subjective view of the reader . Some express themselves more "strongly" than others.

Joe

explicit
A boxer gains more strength and tact
once he is bashed up,,,
so we must all thank

JESS... THE ONE AND ONLY ONE

I know many poets here lamented
and i advised stay on.... but they were weak ...
sad though they left...

I won't
I love it here
where -with- all

loved

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Well, NOT the one and only, but only one in many. Don't take shit from anyone . You have a right to disagree.No one person can make a judgment. One can suggest and you take it from there. I've learned fro Jess as wel as from others on this site.

Keep "cool"

Joe

. istan

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loved

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