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Transcendent

Transcendent
The wind carries me
across the face
of the ample full moon,
so pregnant with light,
it looks likely to burst.
wind, robust and hearty,
chasing the clouds rapidly,
obliquely, and temporarily
obscuring Luna's face,
then clearing it once again.
I ride the currents
with heart in throat,
trying to sing my pleasure,
but it comes out
a resonant hum,
reverberating throughout
my entire being.
I sense the light waves
as they caress and saturate my soul.
I am awash with brilliance
in the delight
and quiver of astral travel.

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I can't thank you enough for the amazing indepth review of my poem! Though your insight you have provided me with invaluable assistance for making my poem better. You ar spot on, with my problem areas. Especially pucuation. I am so glad you injoyed this piece! I look forward to you reviewing my other works!

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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Thank you from the bottom of my little black heart! I am so glad you enjoyed it. You always give the nicest, most encouraging comments. Happy New Year!

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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How can I find fault where there is none. Very descriptive and image provoking indeed.
Chrys

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

and thank you for the help you provided on that bad poem I e-mailed you! Thank you for understanding and being there for me. I hope this new year will be the best you've ever had!

Love, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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Though completely unrelated, I thought of the book "Heartlight", by the same dude who did Merlin... his name escapes me. Anyways.... in that book, a little girl merges her 'heartlight' with that of the universe, and travels amidst the stars faster than the speed of light.

Wonderfully descriptive, and I found myself visualising every word. Nicely done, friend.

~ Jess K
"A parakeet is one who takes care of you until the real keet arrives.." - George Carlin http://www.centranthus.blogspot.com

First of all, it is WONDERFUL to see you here! I hope to see more of you and to read your works,as well!

I haven't read that book, but if you think of the author, please let me know! I would love to read it.

Have a very Happy New Year!

Love, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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i think it's all been said, I can not say anymore except , loved it.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Thank you for your continued support and positive attitude. I appreciate you! I will get that package off to you (mail it) tomorrow.

love, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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