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TRAILBLAZERS

To every one of us shall come
that time of final leaving,
a return back where we came from.
Should this bring joy or grieving?

For the path is marked and clear
by all we know who've gone before,
the old ones who were close and dear
now behind that mystic door.

And once we, too, reach leaving's end
we'll join with those who once were cleft,
with brothers,fathers, grandsires we'll blend
nevermore to be bereft.

So as the years pile up on you
and that last portal comes into site
raise your lamp as you're let through
from this world's darkness into light.

but just before you reach that door
place a blaze upon the way
for those who still must trek some more,
they'll need a path that shows the way.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I reckon we all hope to leave something behind to help guide those still on their path
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It's just what I was pondering in the bath the other day.
Love how the rhyming pattern hasn't dictated the poem, but seems natural with an easy flow.

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Thank you. Most of my musing strikes late at night. My monthly baths don't come often enough lol..........stan

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Thank you but that might be overdoing it a bit. Titles Are important though aren't they? They're the bait that leads to hooking a reader lol.....does that make me a hooker?.............stan

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agree with Jane -21 and Audri. I am not surprised at the turn your meter and rhythm has taken of late, you have worked hard at making them better and it shows. Nice! ~ Gee.
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I guess I finally realized it's better to post less often but to put more thought into what I Do post (regardless the headaches which thinking brings on lol)..............stan

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what difference
has a new knee
made to your poetry

now all here must envy
except Lovedly
who you do once in a way read
and
smile
''joker'' poet he

but charming
humour flows from top to toe
his blood will be colourless
no racialism in him
its all pigmentation of skin
hot
humid
temperate
and
cold
very snow cold also
some times
I saw skin like what chalk
at AMSTERDAM AIRPORT
a tribe could be

and

so the poetry must also be emotionless
he has far too many to worry
motions daily
Lovedly is loved
by all ,if not many
neo

"poetry must be emotionless"............I'll assume that's an attempt at humor......but not a good one lol.........stan

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to join you in your thoughts Stan.
Keep writing

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Thank you, it's always good to see you've joined me for a few minutes.............stan

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old friend now gone..sucessful enough..country life
had his grandkids over...tractor for the old sap days
and his once xmas tree farm...had the old flatbed
was a lancaster navigator in the war..
his plane with pilot went down...
he told us visiting one day...we loved his old car
collection..he was a mechanic too...strong wife.
kids..large property...
he was going to take them through the fields
drove down the hardwood old farm trail...
but couldnt...large mature hardwoods filled
the road...this is what he said to us
'forty years ago there were no trees'
he was starting to suffer from dementia then
so they drove to the maple sugar house and
back....but aging does this....
skips like an old record

I like the thoughts of the woods...blazes....
what have i given....what do I lead for others
whom will sift my posessions and items and
find in them inspiration to lead...
Pathfinders..
well pathfinder my friend
your writing is leading this up and coming
ancient..

if i make it..the love of woods u have
makes me appreciate mine when we
make it up there now...

thank U scribbler

mr wolf!

It's up to each generation to help the coming ones to know which trails to follow. It's the trail blazers who helped us and it's now our job to help the younger folks. Thanks for dropping by and the kind words..........stan

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