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TOYLAND

Submitted by Geremia on Tue, 2013-04-09 12:19

TOYLAND

I turned the light to dim
as day was slowly dying
into Horizon blue
crimson red.
shadows of a pale sun
danced across my bed.
the noise of living faded
into dream
where I found peace
again.

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Editing - rough draft

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Josephus

Wed, 2013-04-10 05:51

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A soft and warming poem with overtones of melancholy it seems. You have a talent for clarity and brevity.

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

Geremia

Wed, 2013-04-10 07:43

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I appreciate that, my friend.

joe longo-geremia-ruffolo

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